I love the idea of it being a fairy tale!
great language, and good use of lines
good work!

Ruby

Wow awsome write!!!! keep it up

5/5

I really liked the wording you used I couldn't predict any of the ending lines like i can on some poems

Nice job this was kool ilike how you said boy and girl feeling what they may.. the idea was cleaver and neat and the flow was good to i like it lots 5.5

Absolutely the best poem ive ever read...if u submitted this u woodve gotten 1st 4 sure. wow..u have a fabulous gift..gr8 rhyming, great plot...gr8 everything! u deserve more than a 5/5 but o well!
~*Who Cares?*~

Oh my, i loved this poem, you have a gift, a poetic gift that needs to be admired, you have so much talent, and that is shown through this poem, please, please keep writing
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Ok that is really sad because I am with this guy and my mom doesn't want us to be together and she doesn't want us to date because he is older. Sort of like this poem but not. But it sort of made me sad.

I like it though. Very sad. But great.
You are on my favorites. :)

>black&&blue

Bu alas
[I think you meant 'but']
A a most precious cost.
[Not sure if you were meant to have two a's there or not...]

This was a great poem though hun. It was one of those poems where I just had to keep on reading. Def. a excellent write here. I'm really starting to like your work too btw. You're a great writer. Keep it up! 5/5

Natalie``

The story line seemed kind of familar........but ll in all I lvoed it! I loved the way you made it a fairy tale! The first few lines captivated me and I was amazed throughout the whole poem!

THis almost sounds like Romeo and Juliette from Shakespear!! What a great poem!! Just beautiful!

Wow, i really liked this one and every other poem ive read so far from you. i just cant pull my eyes off once i start reading. 5/5
Driver

Amazing, I like how you made it into like a story, it really works, and I love that type of poem, so great job.

Omg...this poem drew me in as the last one did...you are an amazing writer...i liked the rhythms and the way you wrote this poem...it was very unique...i thought the poem had a nice story in it...along with strong emotions and fantastic imagery...5/5.

OhhWow. This poem was so dark. It was absolutely amazing. I love your style for this one. Especially hte story format. Very nicely done.

Heya, I like this poem it kinda tells a story with a moral...
"There are no hero's"
I dont think the apostrophe is needed there?!

PS - Thanks for commenting on poems (again) lol and on my poem you commented that I got the double negative thingy.... "not never ending fear" It's kinda puzzled me so I might ask some more people lol, my grammar isn't very good...

Thank you for entering this poem in the contest i had very good poem kinda long *for me i like 10 line poems* but still great poem worth reading x-e-lent *can't spell today*

You are a really talented writer. All I can say is WOW.....5/5

This poem! well i think it was more like the boy and girl where in love! but it was good! keep it up!