Very moving !! i like the gradation ...
keep it up

This is a very moving poem indeed. I know I said constructive criticism but I'm finding it difficult to offer anything but praise. The poem was well written and thought out. I liked especially how you went through the entire body and emotions asking to be shown. The flow was almost faultless too.
There was a couple of line’s I didn’t understand however. "Let me show you how to deal,
Always returning to the start." I feel could have been worded better. And so could the very last line "...The one only that wasn't kept."
You also had a spelling mistake, fifth stanza, line six.
Well done, this was a very enjoyable poem. Keep up the great work.

Very good, i liked it alot.

Gr8 poem really liked it an cheers 4 d comment on my poem!!!
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Funny so many people comment yet so few votes well this one as always is so very good great job

I'm hoping you've found someone to "show you" since this write. You're really very talented and I enjoy reading your poems. Overall it flowed flawlessly until the last line. I'm not sure of the change there. But good job.