Wonders ove nature
by kujo666 Oct 8, 2005
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As the wolf howls at the moon as the lion hunts its pray as the wind blows and a bird flies as a babe fox opens its eyes for the first time as babe bird hatches and as a monkey swings from tree to tree we must all pay tribute to the wonders of nature and all its wonders |
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19 years ago
Josh, good job. I liked this poem very much. Very unique, no one here really pays attention to nature. *applauds*
-Jennifer. *flashes you* (Kids around)
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19 years ago
The imagery was fantastic, though I have a couple suggestions as to how to make it flow a little better.. and a few grammatical mistakes:
"as the lion hunts its pray "
~prey* instead of pray
"as babe bird hatches"
"as a babe fox opens its eyes for the first time"
~baby* instead of babe?
"we must all pay tribute to the wonders of nature and all its wonders"
~Maybe try re-wording it... like... We must all pay tribute to nature and all of its wonders? (just a suggestion)
Other than that, it's a very good poem! Keep writing, just watch out for those grammatical errors. Because it would be a shame for you to get down-voted just because of some minor grammatical errors that could be fixed very easily. Good job.
~BJ~ -
19 years agoby Becca
Wow tht was really cool. short but u sent out a lota wonder and thought. really good.
becca x
