Comments : Scandal

  • 19 years ago

    by amber

    Nice work

  • 19 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    I could sense the humorous touch, it didn’t make me laugh at the top of my lungs, but it was still quite amusing.
    You started really well setting the scene, you had a rhythm going, and the rhyming helped. However, about half way through the first stanza the flow was slightly inhibited due to the lack of rhyme. I feel if you had kept this going in a flawless rhyme just as you had in the beginning, it would have been perfect. You did however manage to keep the story fluent all the way through telling the necessary in the right way. The ending few stanzas I liked and I could picture the bride and groom unable to contain themselves and being called a scandal by all around.
    My verdict is good 4/5. The story was amusing and well told, but could do with the rhyming flow touching up in places.
    Keep writing.

  • 19 years ago

    by Jamie

    I dont completly understand this...is the marriage the scandle? if you so i wouldnt exactly call a marriage a scandle i read through this a few times and still got that message but o well...not really a funny poem but i did like everyting except the confusion