Although I’m aware of this form, I’ve not being properly acquainted with it, therefore I cannot really comment on your use of the form. Other than of course how you wrote around the restrictions of the form. The poem read fluently and I liked how you linked the two together.
I feel this poem could have several deep meanings, which I’m having difficulty understanding completely. This is though, an exceptional poem. I really can’t give any suggestions for this. Well done. I must look up this form and learn more…

Very elegant and well written poem, I am enjoying seeing people explore this style and I am sure I shall have a turn soon enough, your poetry is inspirational in its beauty and ability to paint many different pictures through descriptive and exciting lines, I enjoyed this for although it was short it painted beautiful yet daunting pictures in my mind, intricate beauty was woven within the lines and interesting use of vocabulary and description kept me entranced throughout the poem, kudos to you, very good enjoyable poem.. The style was an interesting choice perhaps you could do more with it when not restricted...

"A spiders web
stretching out to catch what we feed upon"

Those two lines encaptured me so very well, good work on this one and keep up with your writing, well done
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I like the style which you have writen the poem in it's intresting! i also like the creativeness within the poem it's awesome i aven't read a poem quiet like this before! wonderfully done!

~Jacklyn