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  • 19 years ago

    by fallen angel

    Thats a cool poem, i realli liked the way it was set out and how it rhymed. it was a good job, cant wait to read more of your poems. let me know when you do any moren and i'll check them out. good luck for your future writing. vikki xxx

  • 19 years ago

    by Drew Gold

    That was awesome.. really i dont think i have any suggestions/crits, as i usually do.. but this was great.. the main part of this poem that really drew me in and stirred my wonder was the flow, using the words to create such a rhythm.. it was great.. the ending(last 3 lines) did sort of disappoint me.. i mean they weren't bad, but it just didnt seem like a proper ending for such a poem.. it seems like it's forced, and that, i htink, takes away from the quality.. id suggest a rework of the last two lines to maintain the quality feel,.. thats about it.. i loved your paradoxes in relation to confusion.. i really love fiddling with that sort of thing while writing and you've done a great job.. keep it up.. pZ

  • 19 years ago

    by Rusted x Heart

    This was a very nice poem to read. the first lines were very alluring and made me want to read on. you're off to a very good start! keep up the good work!

  • 19 years ago

    by Truest Lies

    Hey, I liked that, it had spunk!

    Good Writing!
    beth

  • 19 years ago

    by Andrea

    Very intertesting. it kept me thinkin, good job

  • 19 years ago

    by Megann Lee

    I like it good flow, wonderful poem. xD Keep up the great work.

  • 18 years ago

    by justeene

    Hey nice poem keep it up