by HansRik
First of all, I must say that I really realate to this, although in my case I am still "a bore." Very well written although the rhyme seems a bit forced, I think. The punctuation at the end should be improved, but these are technicalities which I am sure you would be able to correct within few minutes. I like the flow, and the easy diction which allow your poem to develop without much constraint. I am glad that you have been able to become a "fun" person and full of zest. Keep it up! Well done! |
by HansRik
Uhmmm, I meant "relate," not "realate." |