Hey, i really liked this one, so in depth with emotion. loved the flow and wording choices as well. keep up the great work.

Will you notice when i am falling
when i fall right past your eyes

that part really got me, this poem is amazing it made me want to cry. i think this is my favourite. xxx

OMG...it's amazing...can i print it out...and not to worry your name will be in it...plz

Omg what happened to me? i didnt comment?! lol..wow that is an awesome poem..i totally agree...i felt like this was too someone so i hope that works out...i'm still looking for someone to help me..but same concept.
wow..well done hun and i'm proud you're fighting on..
take care xoxoxoxoxo

Will you please open your eyes
don't let me fall, don't let me go
you say you can see my pain
but it's on the inside where it doesn't show

I love that bit. I really liked that, and the way the rhythm increased towards the end, it really gave a sense of desperation. Damn good!!

This is a really good falling and just shows how sometimes we depend on people to help us when we are failing! its really good and had an amazing flow, i reeeeally liked it

well done
xxxxxxxxx

Brilliant poem, i loved it, nice work xxxx

Another masterpiece.Like Stacy the lines
will you notice when I'm falling
When I fall right past your eyes
just hit such a chord. it is almost like you are in my head. Your talent just floors me sometimes

I love this poem!!....I can relate to it!..Its amazing...It is soo deep in emotion,and I love it..Keep writing, you are rly good at it!

Great poem i loved it so much!!!!!!!!!!