I love you and it hurts

by enfant du tordu chagrin   Oct 10, 2005


Its not that you broke up with me, with that I could deal
As long as you were happy, but thats not how you feel
Its because since you left me, youve pulled further away
I can see the distance grow, each and every day

Added to this there is more and its that when you are in pain
You wont let me comfort you, wont let me ease your strain
You wont share your burden with me, talk and let it lift
Instead to me your back you turn, and towards him youd drift

Its not my business who you talk to, its not my concern
I just wish sometimes youd talk to me, as I do so yearn
I want so much to help you, to take away your ill
Nothing I wish more for, than that I could help you still

It hurts me more that its with him, because it always was
Even when we were together, and it gave me pause
I understood that he knew, about the things that were wrong
But even after I knew the problems, still for him youd long

And then when my world was crumbled, made me feel un-whole
On the day that you left me, crying in my soul
You spent so many hours, at his talking to him
Gave me only 15 minutes, left my world in a spin

So many things I needed to know, my head was in a wreck
But I didnt get any time to think, and no time to check
All the things I wanted to, so I could be more at peace
And when you walked out of that door, from my heart you took a piece

All these things they hurt me, made your leaving even harder
I was left confused and hurt, which made me even sadder
But what makes it worse is seeing you, troubled and upset.
When your thoughts are so full of pain and your eyes are wet

All these things, they make it worse, into my heart they hack
And all I want is to be there for you, when your world is black

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  • 19 years ago

    by Ana Vidovic

    Wow... im truly a fan of you now. This is incredible. Ive never seen anyone deliver these feelings in such a real and emotional way, all at once displaying such sad and beautiful imagery. Your words touch my heart for i have felt such sorrow. But one thing you must always remember is to keep your head up because "the pain now, is part of the happiness then" or vice versa depending on ur situation. Things will always go wrong in our lives, otherwise we wouldnt be human. We must however, find a way to pick ourselves up because there must be a brighter tomorrow. It could strike you in the middle of nowhere as long as you remain optimistic. The important part is to see the beauty in every little thing in order to find meaning to the greater picture. Again, great poem. Take care,

    Ana*

  • 19 years ago

    by x Saiya

    I love your work. Well done, yet again. :) 5/5

    Saiya

  • 19 years ago

    by Jamie

    I liked this one alot, i really know this feeling. as for criticism i dont know how much i can give you it really is a great poem. um sometimes rhymes seemed forced because you had to murder a few sentences to get them to rhyme like this one

    Instead to me your back you turn

    im not against rearranging sentences but it just didnt sound good and it was ven nessacary as to make the poem rhyme either

    but really you rhymed perfectly, and you worded most of the poem very well. so great job definatly giving this a 5/5

  • 19 years ago

    by Tammi

    I love it and I feel it very deep I have a friend who I feel just this way about keep up the good work 5/5

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