by Jamie Oct 11, 2005
category :
Love, romance /
desired love
Victim: |
by Carmen
Whoah..... very.. different. i liked it though. i liked the originality |
Jamie, this is a very good poem. I really liked your rhyming scheme.:D I also liked the whole Victim/"killer" thing. It was really interesting and it was a great poem! Keep it up. 5/5! |
by Britney
Wow Jamie! I reallie loved this one and your rite it was a bitt hard to understand at first but as you read on you begin to understand.. i really liked how it was so unique great job. 5/5 |
by Truest Lies
Ouch--very, very strong. I just had trouble working out who the victim and the killer were, but I got the general idea. And how dare you say you suck at writing! Its not true! You must have quite a lot of talent, just time to exercise it. |
by HansRik
If that was not good, I cannot wait to see a good one, it would be a chef d'oeuvre! This was an excellent work! WOW! The poem starts and ends excellently. The style is also really unique, and the use of metaphor is very efficient. The dialogued structure is very consistent and helps to develop the meaning. Very well done indeed. |