WOW... as if u said it wasnt good.. this is one of the best poem i have seriously read, and im not just saying that.... it flows so beautifully, and sends across such a blunt message though, metaphorically... i like the unique style u used to write it in.. it really suites it.. i couldnt have written it beter myself.. im kind of jealous haha.... if u have any writting tips, please tell me, id really like to know...my favorite line of yours, though simple, and opening the poem with such meaning, is "Call out for me and Ill make it
Did I turn out not as youd expected" it really sets the poem off. wow.. 5/5 please comment and vote for mine... Wreckless Emotion and Killing me Softly.. thanks -falling

Wow that was awesome..Really great poem. well..i think i understand it anyway:S!!!lol...i really liked the metaphorical use though and the conversation lay out.
Awesome poem hun 5/5...
thank you so much for all the comments...so greatly appreciated:Pxoxo

If that was not good, I cannot wait to see a good one, it would be a chef d'oeuvre! This was an excellent work! WOW! The poem starts and ends excellently. The style is also really unique, and the use of metaphor is very efficient. The dialogued structure is very consistent and helps to develop the meaning. Very well done indeed.

Ouch--very, very strong. I just had trouble working out who the victim and the killer were, but I got the general idea. And how dare you say you suck at writing! Its not true! You must have quite a lot of talent, just time to exercise it.

Good Writing!
beth

Wow Jamie! I reallie loved this one and your rite it was a bitt hard to understand at first but as you read on you begin to understand.. i really liked how it was so unique great job. 5/5

Jamie, this is a very good poem. I really liked your rhyming scheme.:D I also liked the whole Victim/"killer" thing. It was really interesting and it was a great poem! Keep it up. 5/5!
~BJ~

Whoah..... very.. different. i liked it though. i liked the originality