This is a really good poem! you say it's incomplete, but i think it works well as it is. You've got a really interesting structure going aswell...if you do decide to continue, this should be a very interesting poem. keep it up.

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Hey very good poem. It doesn't suck at all. You rock!!! I don't know if you remember me but I was the one who had a convo w/ you while we were in skool and you were skipping class. I think my name was your-dirty-lil-secret then but I changed it. KEEP IT UP!!! w00t

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I think it's cool the way it is, but if you feel you need to change it then it's up to you. I don't really have any suggestions, cause I like it this way.
5/5 from me anyways.

*VioletRaven*