Awaiting a new day

by camronswifie   Oct 13, 2005


Restless nights
as 10 turns into 12
i lay in my bed
tossing and turning
looking for peace of mind
eyes wide open blinded by the dark
contemplating on new starts
dreaming with my eyes closed
because i have seen too much

now as 11 turns into 1
i still find myself struggling
tossing and turning
looking for peace of mind
living in my dreams
instead of living my dreams
laying here awaiting
for the moon to leave
and the sun to come to day

as 2 turns into 3
tranquility sets
second guesses and
confusion from the illusion
of the day start to fade
with my eyes close shut
i start to live my dream
and there i lay
awaiting a new day

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  • 18 years ago

    by Lyn

    I just read your comment to the previous commenter and it was out of all proportion to the stimulus.If you don't want people's honest comments then don't publish your work! Take the rough with the smooth.

  • 18 years ago

    by Lyn

    I have been there and you express it so well.A very well written poem.

  • 19 years ago

    by camronswifie

    First of all you need to relax you taking my writing to the head its not that serious i only used looking for peace of mind twice because i wanted it that way and nobody ran out of vocab. the only one gon run out of vocabulary is you when i curse ya a** out biaatch FALL BACK go sit ya young a** down keep ya stupid a** opinions to yaself cuz it is definitely not needed and hop off my cl!!tt

  • 19 years ago

    by sock

    This poem has some trend to it, with the times stated being two hours apart. however, you used the phrase "looking for peace of mind" only twice in 3 stanzas, making it seem like it wasnt meant to be part of the repetition and you simply ran out of vocab to describe that feeling.but other than that, you were quite precise on the emotions of the half-asleep person, nice work

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