This poem has some trend to it, with the times stated being two hours apart. however, you used the phrase "looking for peace of mind" only twice in 3 stanzas, making it seem like it wasnt meant to be part of the repetition and you simply ran out of vocab to describe that feeling.but other than that, you were quite precise on the emotions of the half-asleep person, nice work

First of all you need to relax you taking my writing to the head its not that serious i only used looking for peace of mind twice because i wanted it that way and nobody ran out of vocab. the only one gon run out of vocabulary is you when i curse ya a** out biaatch FALL BACK go sit ya young a** down keep ya stupid a** opinions to yaself cuz it is definitely not needed and hop off my cl!!tt

I have been there and you express it so well.A very well written poem.

I just read your comment to the previous commenter and it was out of all proportion to the stimulus.If you don't want people's honest comments then don't publish your work! Take the rough with the smooth.