Comments : Depressed...

  • 18 years ago

    by lOVER

    Hiya :D really awesome, i really liked the two last stanzas.
    But somethings missing from the:
    I seem to laugh along
    and smile at sudden things
    but no one knows
    that I'm depressed

    I don't know why
    and I don't know how
    but you got me to be depressed

    its good but your repeating some words like that im depressed and but you got me to be depressed

    it doesnt have a flow to it coz ur repeating it, so just fix it so its more rhythmic and ur poem'll be the best !

    have fun, good job!