by Jacob M Parnell Oct 17, 2005
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
If Tomorrow never came for me. |
Dont give up on god. |
I am keeping up with your amazing work and this poem outlines who you are and alot of your other poems keep it up Jake |
I feel that way about my dad. gr8 poem so much emotion! 5/5 |
by sarah
Yet another great poem def 5/5 take care sarah x |
by Void
Hey! Just back checkin some more of your work (told you i liked it hehe) and I really liked this one, simply because you expressed yourself directly to someone, where as usually ppl (including me) are only talking to an unknown person, named 'you' lol. The only part that i wasn't sure of was when you changed the rhyme scheme from a,b,c,b, to a,b,b,c... I dunno if you understand but it's this verse: |