I personally think it could be developed further.

Simon, I personally think the person above ^^^^ does not understand what the Haiku poetry form is?

This was a nice Haiku, keep up the good work.

Regards,

Steve

For me a good poem opens a picture in my mind, and here you've done exactly that. It's beatiful. I greatly admire anyone who can create haiku, and you are no exeption. Great write, and keep up the good work.
*VioletRaven*

That's a very nice poem. I love Haiku, was it the Japanese who inspired it? I don't remember. But I love it :)