by Ann Stareyes
Luanne...touching and heartfelt... beautiful job. |
by Chelsey
Oh my sweet Jesus!,,,I...I....I...what do I say!? Luanne you hit this poem right on..the hammer straight on the nail!!...This poem needs no work or suggestions..It was so perfectly written!! I have to say it was a little creepy because I started to write a poem EXACTLY like this one..i mean down to the bone EXACT!..it is a little different..sorta the same ending because mine has to do with a call, but that is so weird how...oh man I have goosebumps! I could go on with my blabbering but will stop at...THIS WAS A GREAT WRITE! |
by HOLLY ARMER
This is an amazingly uplifting piece. I love the positive spin you put on what would be a tragic life. Well done, keep it up~Holly |
This Was Really Sweet *Hugs* I'm Very Impressed...This Was Out Of The Ordinary...I Like Your Style 5/5 xoxo-Nikki-xoxo |
by JJ
I love the ending...instead of feeling sad, it made me smile. :) great write! keep up the good work |
by jac
Wow, that was amazing!! the ending was awesome.. well, all of it was! keep up the great work. -peace- |
by confused
Touching poem i like it alot...keep poem alive |
by x Saiya
Oh, Wow, Luanne, that was amazing! Such powerful words, such a sweet story.. I loved it. :) Great job 5/5 |
...i still await that phone call... |
Thats such a sweet poem. The beginning was very sad and the ending was the true happy ending. Nicely written... it flowed well. 5/5 |
by Razorblade
Terrific poem! You did a great job, keep writing. |
Ohh....that was awesome |
by Leanne
Aw gr8 poem gr8 use of words |
Great poem. |
by teresa
Great poem i love it 5/5 |
by JL
Omg! this is so powerful! im crying its so touching... i think its great you ended on a positive note. keep up the amazing work. take care XXXXX |
by Autumnstorm
WOW! that was amazing! I wish I could wright like that! and what actually really touched me was that I am too still waiting for that phone call!(like that'll ever happen he choses to leave and from, what I hear, I'm glad he did! AAAAHHHH! I'm babbling again sorry) but great poem it was very touching:) |
Oh my god! this is the best poem i've read in ages. firstly its a great story line...i mean, that part where she's about to kill herself and then her dad rings the phone...that was brillient. this poem had emotion, depth and wonderfully intelligent writing. usually around now i say my favorite stanza, but i can't decide. if you get a chance could you read some of mine, i'd really like to hear your opinion...maybe you could give me some pointers, lol. |
by Lee Merchant
Wow! Such a beautiful poem. I honestly believe you should enter that in on Poetry.com. It was wonderful! Is that a true story? Please write back. Thank you! |
by Lithium
Omg this is excellent i loved ur story and everything great work xox rc |