Gr8 poem! keep up the gr8 work! that fits me well...im amazed that u can use such large words to rhyme. That's cool! can u mayb chek out sum of my stuff?? |
by Z
Good work as usual. : |
by Z
Upon my second read through this line really spekls to me "I bare the pain of my own affliction ". Kinda makes you think. Excellent... |
The Word Affliction Was Used Too Many Times In This Poem, It Was a Great Word In This Poem With Alot Of Meaning, Be Careful Not To Abuse Keywords In a Poem Sometimes, It Makes It a Bit, Predictable And Common....But Overall I Liked It xoxo-Nikki-xoxo |