by Truest Lies Oct 20, 2005
category :
Life, society /
other
She sat on the pavement, |
by Bugg
That was really good! I agree with some of the other people, it seemed like you were trying a little too hard. But the emotion is there, and that's really all that matters to me. I really love this poem. It's going on my fave list. |
by amelia
Hey beth ...this is a nice poem... |
by aaron c s
There was great flow to it in some parts but others there wasnt. there were also some parts where it seemed like u were trying too hard to rhyme. i liked it overall though. the emotion and the wording were great! 5/5 |