There was great flow to it in some parts but others there wasnt. there were also some parts where it seemed like u were trying too hard to rhyme. i liked it overall though. the emotion and the wording were great! 5/5

Hey beth ...this is a nice poem...
its nice that u can actually FEEL what she feels & write it down..
loved reading it
i like the repetition
love
amy

That was really good! I agree with some of the other people, it seemed like you were trying a little too hard. But the emotion is there, and that's really all that matters to me. I really love this poem. It's going on my fave list.