I know how hard it is to get over that ex. I'm still trying to convience myself that me and my ex are just friends now. Great poem and easy to relate to. Keep it up!!!!

If this is turly your first poem, you really do show promise. Great work! ^v^

Hey i loved the poem! its veally good to be your first one! keep up the good work girl!
-thornton

I thought the first couple of lines were great...not that i thought the rest was crap, lol.

Brad

P.S. by the way, thanks for commenting on my poem.

P.P.S. i actually wrote the last line of 'suprise visit' first. the only reason i wrote it was because of the very last line, lol.

Hey i really liked ur poem! gr8 job! Keep it ^...wow i would hav never guesed dat diz would have been ur first poems..?!..well Keep writing!

By da way..Thx 4 ur comment!!! :)

Very good first poem nice work
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jess

I know what you mean!! The hardest thing to do is say goodbye....but if you can really say goodbye to someone that you love you're either very stupid or very strong!!! (we'll stick with strong!!) Great job!

Great job on this poem. I really liked it. It has a good rhyme scheme to it.

Ohh, Hun this is a VERY GOOD first poem hehe if I were to post on here the very first poem I wrote it would be hilarious hehe this is amazing,you've definetly grown into a great writer, keep on writing, hehe take care

I wish my ex could do that. Things would be better. But anyways, good write.

This is a great poem. It flowed well and it's from the heart.

Tiffany.xox.

I really liked this poem, particularly because I can connect with it. I don't want to get too much into why i can connect with it, but I know that feeling and your poem, altho short and sweet, got across some of that feeling. good job :)

For a first poem, this is good. It started our really well, the flow was spot on and it made sense (sometimes simple poems say more). Then somewhere in the poem you have two lines that are much longer than the rest, and this is where the flow is inhibited. If you split up these lines, it should give way to the original flow again.
The last line threw me, it did not follow the rhyming pattern, and I don't understand the saying goodbye part. If you wrote a couple more lines about this, or dropped that one, it would make more sense. A sweet and emotional poem though. Keep writing.

Awwwwwwwww this is a really sweeet poem, well done

Excellent Poem its amazing how you can write these short poems but yet they be so powerful and u can see that you put feeling into it, Great poem, excellent excellent excellent 5/5, i hope to read some new ones of yours, ill ttyl

The Poet

Hey your VERY talented..you have a good writing skill and i love all of ur poems! keep up the good work...check out sum of my poems sum time kk *much love* Sierra

I love this poem, i can totally relate. its a difficult situation to be in.

Love
Jacs
xxx

I loved it. it was a great poem. wow. keep up the great work.
Emma 5/5

That's bloody great, a story of unconditional love, it's great I love it

Awsome. I really liked it. *5/5*