Hey great subject maybe play with style and see if it pops a bit better:) great work, thnk you for you ment comments :)

Jenn

Lol, u don't have to keep commenting on my poems...but i'll keep commenting on urs! lol......i love this poem....it reminds me of me and how my parents won't leave me alone or won't let me free! i hate that...but this poem speaks for all! its awsome!