Cute, again maybe expand on feelings, try stanzas or something to make it really stand out:)

Keep it up hun
Jenn

This is good, really deep. i asure u though thatdeath can not make life better i have learned that. i also think if u were 2 go in front of him and kill yourself bcause of him he would stop u no mattert wat u thik. cause me and my bf got in a fiht and he told me 2 kill myself and i nearly did right therebut he stopped me even though it was his idea. ok thats was too long 4 a comment but oh well. thanks 4 da comment on mine.