I got confused over the rhyming pattern here. at first is starts with a first and last line rhyme. and even when you add an extra line into the 3rd stanza, it doesnt throw the reader off too much. Then the rhyming scheme changed completely in the 4th stanza no being the last 2 lines rhyme. and in the final stanza the rhyming scheme is lost completely.

Try to keep it consistant, as to allow the reader to flow through the poem.

"Remember 4th of July?
Laying in each other arms,
Under a lit up sky."

best stanza in the whole poem!

Aww... and once again it made me cry! wow.. i must be really emotional today. You are such a great talent & I can relate to all of your poems so well. It's crazy. I'm definitely adding you to my faves. Great job!5/5**