This poem is good. I mean it has a great meaning to it and I can kind of tell your feelings. Thats a really good thing for someone to feel when there reading someones poem. But I think it could have been written better, I dont think that it flowed very well, i mean i have those poems where i dont care what it sounds like i jus wanna get my feelings out you kno? so this might be one of urs so im not gonna critize you for that. But other than that I think it was pretty good.