Don't stop writing -- you have a lot more subject matter to work with -- the consistent with your rhyming and verse layout like you have been. Now only three lines for each verse -- capitalized the first word of each verse and end each verse with an exclamation mark and skip the line after each verse

Don't stop writing -- you have a lot more subject matter to work with -- the consistent with your rhyming and verse layout like you have been. Now only three lines for each verse -- capitalized the first word of each verse and end each verse with an exclamation mark and skip the line after each verse

Sounds like my life. great portrayance* of life in the dark. i loved how the words flowed together.

A very descriptive poem. Imaginative with an economy of words. I read and reread it.

Mmm... a very erie poem. made me feel kind of panicky while reading it. me like.