I like the poem! it's really cool. the only line i had problems with was
"you looked into as you told me lies" i read it like three times before i got it. maybe it's just me but it took me a while. that kinda broke the flow. but other wise it's a really good piece even though i've read a lot of poems about this topic i haven't read any like this really. good job!

~jacklyn

Very cool. It is written how i like poetry. IN a prose style, the rhymes aren\'t there, but the sentence structure is wonderful and simple. Very good.

Very cool. It is written how i like poetry. IN a prose style, the rhymes aren\'t there, but the sentence structure is wonderful and simple. Very good.

The rhymes are there, i just missed them because i read every sentence to the end instead of every line. Very beautifully done