by Jacklyn
So whoever voted this a vote, just don't listen to them. it's better then that. i actually really like this poem. the first 5 lines has way too many "no more" in it. i think if you fix that up this poem would be stronger. just a little advice though. i have seen the horrors of divorce though many times within my extended family and friends. it's terrible with how many families break apart these days. i hope that what ever you are going through works out for the best. |
You're right. I worry too much about content and reality. I should really pay more attention to composition. I just put the raw feeling out but sometimes it doesn't flow right. I think I got two poems mixed up and tried to combine them into one. But I got the feeling out in the order that they were felt at the present time but the event event occured or events I should say since it happened twice with the same person was different each time. Sorry for the run on sentence, lol. My English teacher taught me better than that. I am just getting some of this now. Way too late I know, lol. What can I say I am thickheaded, lol. Will try to look at first five lines, again, really didn't want to, lol. I have a rebellious nature, lol. Hard to teach, lol. Not waste of time just slow, lol. Really long winded here, lol. Geez, I think I am writing another letter, lol. Well, anyways thanks for the input. |
Oh, ok, I rewritten it, lol. |
by SSSAAMMMYY
Nice poem! I love it! Keep up the GREAT work! |