Beautiful !!
I really liked this, such a sweet idea.
5/5

xxx cici xxx

Omg.. that was such an amazing piece.. gr8 write!! ur rhyming was amazing, and u had a gr8 choice of words.. aww, it was reli sad, but i still loved it.. i loved ur last two lines the most.. thumbs up! u got my 5
take care
Nannoush

Great poem!..im not sure what to say, but it was wonderful...u can tell u put ur heart into it..hope all works out...*rates 5*
meg

Wow that was gr8..good vocabulary...good rhythm..all around gr8 poem. 5/5 4 u!

I love it, nice description, and original words. Keep writing. 5/5