Broken Up!!!

by RadianceInReverse   Oct 26, 2005


When I think of you being hurt
I become sad, broken up inside
comparing you to myself
I become depressed agian...

...broken up inside,
tears flow down my face
I hide the pain away with a smile, happiness displaced
writing these words on this screen
my feelings flowing through my blood, i want to die.

As i write these heartfelt words
the pain starts to fade away
I no longer fear the end,
the end thats creeping near me.

I know that this poem sucks but plz help me make it better and/or longer!!! Thanks I love all of you who comment and rate my poetry!!!(plz comment) Joclyn

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  • 19 years ago

    by Ella

    It doesn't suck joc ilove you too

  • 19 years ago

    by ~â‚£ading |nspiration~

    I don't think it suck...I think it's nice...both is different in their own way...so I think you should not delete either of them...cause they are both good...

  • 19 years ago

    by Pure Silence

    When I think of you hurting
    I feel it deep down inside
    I become broken and alone
    Always comparing me to you

    I start to cry the suppressed tears
    My fake smile melting away
    My happiness displaced as I write
    I want to die, make it go away!

    I scream and shout, I write it out
    Never to be heard by you
    My heartfelt words written
    My pain begins to ease away

    Till next time, I’m happier this way

    Maybe i dunno what your lookin for hun but i tired

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