*tear* gr8 again! wow...u r so talented! i tri 2 b mean about wat i say but i cant find nethin wrong..gr8 all around poem!
~*Who Cares?*~

Beautiful poem hun
I love the last 4 lines
well written and well expressed
yalla keep it up
good luck
Lov Ya
Yours
Nema
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Wow, this poem is soooo powerful in meaning. It flows wonderfully. I love how it's written. Great job.

.t0uching lines. very well written. l0t 0f em0ti0n in this p0em. g0od j0b but!

Wow that was really sad. I just felt like pulling you out of it that whole time. ..i don't really know how to explain what i mean..but wow.
Great job hun
chin up, maybe with every bit we die...we learn to grow again!?
xoxo

I loved the wording. the pause a felt before each line made it really good. very well written. 5/5

The last stanza if really good.. very touching!

Very deep, and I agree that the last stanza was very dark...very heart-touching.

Good Writing!
beth

Beautiful. the use of vocabluary is very good. it flows very well, and engages the reader. wonderful work. thanks for your comments, they were very kind

Ruby

Wow! This is my fave so far! You convey pain and sadness in such a beautiful way! Very good!

I really liked the ending of this poem, but i'm not going to lie the flow was very choppy unless you split each line in two kinda like with a pause in the middle but you didn't use commas there so the flow was choppy...anyways i liked the ideas your vocab is great so 4/5 good job

Great poem, the flow was quite good. the content and expression was perfect. a few of the rhymmes seemed slightly forced though.

Great poem i loved it!!!

Again, nice poem... Great flow, great ideas expressed, just overall great.. Keep it up, your an amazing writer...

sammie

Wow, this poem asks for comments. Life is hard, difficult and often seems impossible. Giving up is the easist option for all of us; it takes strength and immense courage to be able to live. Your rhyming fit into place well and kept a beautiful flow, you did a good job of not making the ryhming seemed forces, that takes a lot of talent. I can relate to this poem on many levels, because I am a person who has difficulty dealing with emotional pain, and has a high tolerance for physical pain . . . a bad combination. keep you head up baby, you only have one life to live, once it's gone you will loose all your chances to makes something of it. Dying doesn't solve anything, doesn't bring any good, I found that out the hard way and I will be forever tainted by my mistakes of the past (see my poem Suicide through someone else's eyes, for more detail or Sorry is Never enough.) You write well, I look forward to reading more of your work.

-Tainted Mikochan

Wow its a powerful poem :)

was great and loved the flow:D

keep up the hard work

Jacs
xxx

Aww....i can say this is rlly true...5/5