Okay, the poem started out fine, and then you forced the last coouple of rhymes...

I know I do it too, but I'm learning not to and I think I could give you a little help. =)

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(")-(") Arrivederci!

-I really liked the way you put this one. I love the rain and liked how you made it represent tears. Yet again, I can relate. Nice job rates 5 like the last...-

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I ♥ Cereal

This is awesome...I really love it...especially the first Stanza...it flows so smoothly...

I love the way you explained the metaphor in the poem very neat little idea there i liked that good poem 5/5

Really liked how you tied reality into metaphors... It rocked. Keep it up.
-Kate

Wow how sad :(
very touching
5/5

Nice. there is a song called stormy weather... its a good poem. good work again

Ruby

Wonderful poem no more needed to say!

Beautiful poem. It's wonderful, I can really relate to it too. 5/5

Love the metaphors, they worked really well.

Really good I like this one and *Friends Till the End* their both full of emotion. I love this part

*This of course is a metaphor,
To make you ask for more.
The rain is really tears,
From my sadness, my fears,*

Its so perfect how you changed it, good job!

I like your writing style.

I don't think u need to improve ur writing u are perfect the way that u r....keep up the great work 5/5