The extravagant words in the beggining could trip some people up. Poetry is about being able to touch base with other people. Most people wouldn't be able to understand the words you have included at the beggining. But in the end its a good point of what your trying to make.

Wow... This is yet another really touching poem. As said by this other guy, it's not obvious what you're getting at in the first few lines of the poem, but the meaning becomes more clear towards the end and is all tied up very nicely! :)

Keep it up xXx