God, girl!! thats so amazing.. i so love ur last stanza.. the whole poem is gud, too and its extremely sad... gr8 job
the rhyme was gr8 and it flowed well
take care
Nannoush

Yet another great poem! I just love how its almost like you seem to slowly fade away to the reader as the poem goes along and then you reappear in such a strong way to wrap it up. I loved how it started somewhat innocently sad and ended in a sort of sinister dark way. The second last stanza was my favourite, I just feel it really embodied the emtpiness and almost...stillness of everything to someone who feels 'invisible'. Very nicely written!

To go with the theme...What if no one found you? "You" as in the narrator. I don't know why I relate so well to your poetry...But I do know that's a good thing!

I'm going to have a cry now Ruby
hurt is so painful espeacially when your invisivible and no one sees your in pain and hurting so bad
but the ultimate person is making me invisible and I just wish he could see that him doing what he does really hurts me
lol that rhymed sorry
I loved this poem keep it up
love
Em

Good work, this poem has a lot of strong emotion in it. Very sad poem.

It was really good. it was sad but good

Amazing... you did a wonderful job writing this and its almost perfect... there were a few things that didnt fit but it was still great! keep it up!

sammie

I really wonder...y hv i been so late to get hold of this poem...this is an awesome one dear...the pain has just been xpressed they way it should be...amazing work

though i m too far..if u ever feel like just letting somethings out from ur heart....try me.

all the best and take care

I cant say much more than WOW!

Keep it up

Darkest Wishes

Wow, your poems just suddenly got a whole load better. This was another masterpiece - incredibly well written. So sad!

Peace. [Sole]

I've already commented on this poem
lol
anyway, ill do it again because it was just THAT good
love
~Em