by bonnie Oct 27, 2005
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
Nobody noticed the tears in her heart, |
I wouldn't change anything. Just let the words come out and don't spend a lot of time reworking. First writes are usually the best as they are the most heartfelt. Nice job. |
by Autuumnbree
I think you done a great job. I also think it is sometimes hard to express true emotions in a poem, but u hit her pain right on the nail. |