Interesting poem is cute!

OK... where do i start? The ideas are good, and the intention is there, but you simply made this an uniteresting and very predictable poem. I dont like that, u have to, U HAVE TO keep the reader's interest. I knew what would happen in the next line, so it was quite boring. u didnt really develop the ideas are either, but oh well....... Nice try tho, u could prob do much better because u've got the ideas, just need to develop and make it interesting. i wont vote this time, because this deserves a 1 or a 2, but when u make a good poem, call me and i'll definately vote a 5 which u really can afford!.

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