I really liked this.. very emotional and heart-wrenching. keep it up! -peace-

If this is based on life experiences, you should stop cutting. If it's not, then you are very creative. This poem had a lot of emotion, and it made me sad, just thinking this happens to people. IF you want someone to talk to, I'm here :)
awesome poem though..

Wow.... Is that child you?

I love the way you showed your emotions in this one. you just put your thoughts on paper and that is what poetry is all about! Great job!

Very sad. It held a very dark feeling all the way through, which I suppose is what was supposed to happen..

Good Writing!
beth

*gushes* love love love love love love love can't say it enough times i can totaly relate and just love this one your best by far!!!~~~

Very good peice, very well written. expressed very well

Wow! That was really really great! Very sad and kinda depressing..but the words you used and ahh it was really good!!! keep it up!

It's a bit repetitive but the descriptions and attention to detail were there. I don't know about word depth. It just sort of felt as though it sat on the surface. I hope you don't cut. Just keep writing.

Im sorry if this is a real life expirence and if it is i advise to stop cutting!! But over all this poem was very good!! It brought a tear to my eye!! Fantastic!! 5/5

Wow..i can really picture the whole thing in my mind...thats awsome...but when u typed the word ''Thur'' i think u ment to type ''through''....Great Great poem!!!

I like how you make your poems into stories. It really gives the reader some of your unique and personal flavor! Thats why i'm attracted to your poems, they're nicly done and come straigh for you and really tell a story of who you are! The flow was kind of off in a few places, you might want to hand your poem to a friend and have them read it for the first time out load, then take notes on where their voice changed or where they stutter and slur a line, Then you'll know where to change the flow, somtimes all it takes is changing your wording around! Hope this helps

I liked this... and your really good at descriptions and what-not. Maybe you should try writing some stories? I agree with kaylee it did kind of sit on the surface... you can see your emotions and depression in it... but yeah... keep up the good work.. -jen-

I already commented on this one two!! Im sorry i dont have anything else to add!!! Sorry 5/5!!

Your topic seems to be getting a little repetive, altho it was a good poem..i noticed you kept writing "thur" thru out the poem..maybe you mean "thru"...neways. i thought i should just comment on that. other then that, i liked the poem alot. 4/5

Long, Detailed, Very Nice.

Love MKKA.