Give your self more credit or ill have to hurt you, your a wonderful poet yourself:)

Ok, so its not the best poem in the world, but it sure as hell duznt suk!
i really liked the las 2 lines,

The Knife has already severed the vein
My blood has begun to drain!!!

tht bit woz really well written.

good work. keep goin.

xXx

It's good...not bad at all...really holds deap meaning...if you want to make it better...don't change the meaning...you can play with the words...luv ya...Jane