by dragonfly Oct 29, 2005
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
The mind, ripped and torn. Her heart shattered and scarred. The lost and lonely soul. Her life shameful and blurry. You don't want her, shes broken. You disagree? Take another look, what do you see? |
by Becky
This poem is great, i can't wait to read the finished product. keep ti up your amazing. 5/5 |
by Jamie
I can't wait to hear the rest but what you have got so far is very nice. your vocab is really what makes it so good, and the way you use the words together are really good. your very smart and i love your writing great job 5/5 the 3rd stanza was my favorite |
Even if it isnt finished...so far it is very good. 5/5! |
by ASPHYXIATED
Yea this did rock! It will be better when finished give it a strong ending :P |
by NannO
Hey.. that was soo gud... such powerful words, and u described evrything perfectly.. i cud imagine wat the girl was doin.. gr8 job.. i lykd the last stanza, especially the last line.. lookin 4ward to the ending!! |