Great concept, maybe just structure it a bit more to make it really pop:)

Jenn

Really nice poem, it flowed and rhymed well.
5/5

thanks for your comment, i really appreciate it.

xxx cici xxx

Good write

Wow i loved it keep up the great work:P

Such sadness and grief in a well written poem.

Very beautiful. its a very touching poem. well done

Ruby

Wow very very excellent. u have a gr8 gift, i hope u use it!
~*Who Cares?*~

This was much better then the last one it wasn't messy at all and you used a better vocab. the only part i thought was kinda weird was

When you see me hanging from that rope tomorrow please do not fright

it's not that it dosn't flow it's just that it's kinda stupid to say like really imma kill myself but don't worry it's just pointless information because anybody killing themselves is going to scare people and ecsepcially a mother to a child...so i thought that part wasn't even needed cause i dunno lol it just dosn't work but 5/5 i really liked this poem

I really like the sickening twist in this pow, usually it would be the chld cmmiting suicide. This is the firs of thie poem that I have seen. way to go M'Dear. =)

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(")-(") Arrivederci!

It's kind of contradicting:
"all we did was disagree" then
"everytime i see you i smiled"
which is neat, it gives the poem a twist
nice work, 5/5

Really love it keep up the great work!!!!!!