WOW!!! Thats really good, a lot of emotion! Yup, really really good!! kepp it up!:-)

This can be a lyrics for a rock song! That's what I feel while reading this. The repetition kind of brings the emotions out in a stronger way, more vivid, more solid. This is easy to read, easy to get the picture of it. And I like it a lot. :)

Great poem i agree about the repitision it really enforcises the emotions