Lost soul

by Bug1219   Oct 31, 2005


Looking in the mirror
at this invisible face
this soul has vanished
withouta trace
only the rememberance of
what was left behind
and i cry still
for someone i cant find
a soul that was happy
now lives in strife
walking in the darkness
of this depressed life
should i end it all
or try to be strong
it doesnt matter
they wouldnt care if i was dead
have i been fooled all together?
by ther awful lies
come, and wipe
these blck tears from my face
when my soul is found
no more tears i will shed

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  • 18 years ago

    by VYXSIN

    Omg great great great poem. your a really kool poet and you should keep on writing.

  • 18 years ago

    by Melissa S. Masucci

    Ok check for: typos (spaces between words, etc.), grammar errors (missing punctuation, 'i' not capitalized, etc.), and spelling errors (remembrance, for example).

    You had good rhythm going with the rhyming up until the line with "life" and then it stopped - what happened? It's really good up to there, though, but it seems to fall apart after that. :(

  • 18 years ago

    by kim

    WOW that is an awsome poem. very emotion felt. just please if u feel this way be strong ppl will always be there someone loves you and yes they would care if you died.

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