WOW that is an awsome poem. very emotion felt. just please if u feel this way be strong ppl will always be there someone loves you and yes they would care if you died.

Ok check for: typos (spaces between words, etc.), grammar errors (missing punctuation, 'i' not capitalized, etc.), and spelling errors (remembrance, for example).

You had good rhythm going with the rhyming up until the line with "life" and then it stopped - what happened? It's really good up to there, though, but it seems to fall apart after that. :(

Omg great great great poem. your a really kool poet and you should keep on writing.