Not bad. it got a bit repeditive with all the sencatnces ending with the same rhme. a lovly idea in genral. some of the words used didnt quite fit (the size of a pea) it cheapens the kind of fantasy feel of this poem.
nice work though

Ruby

Pretty good, It would be better if you made it longer

Awww this poem made me happy sad and made me giggle lol, well the part about the pea did lol. this poem is soo cute and sweet. i love it, keep up the good work.5/5

lots of love
*~*Becky*~*