I get what you are trying to say, but the poem seems to repetitive. The rhymes repeat over and and over again and I believe masks your poems true power. Think about it, I look forward to reading more from you.

Aww hun this is so cute, I loved it I can definetly relate well done you have talent keep this up my dear you're awesome lubb youuu

I like your poem very much it really is good and I'm glad that u like my peom (thoughts) well B keep it up.
love ya

Always and 4ever
santana