Great poem. you write very well.
I liked this part the best:
Those fluffy, pure clouds
Floating aimlessly overhead
Once looked weightless and free
Now they're crushing me instead

Destiny has called my name
Its voice dark and bold
People gather, surrounding me
Even still, I feel so cold

wow, I really loved these stanzas.
keep it up.
much love,
marjan

I love it. wonderful imagry there. it is quit unlike any other poem i have read as far as content. great work indeed.

ruby

That was beautiful imagery and sensory writing. a great poem. well done.

Wow girl!! this is some very deep stuff.. gr8 job!! i mean, i lyk ur rhythm, very well-chosen words... i reli lyk the way u compared wat the world looked lyk b4, and wat it looks lyk now.. pessimistic and sad, but nonetheless amazing!!!
keep up the gud work
thnx 4 ur comment, it meant a lot
take care
Nannoush

Wow.. this is so metaphorical... it has so much meaning... before i read the ending, i was under the impression u were reffering to life and love and how u feel about it now, and the before, but really its an over all representation of life itself.. it totally consumed my thoughts and really got me thinking.. its a shame you only have 3 poems, which i said i would only rate 3, but i wish u had more, so i could read more of them.... you are a great writer and i love how u can express somthing by saying somthing else... great use of language in this!

Great poem I liked it alot

Its hard to imagine what your feelings would be if you really had to face death. you did a great job with this.