That was really good... advise try using more commas, and periods. makes the read pause and gives ur poem a beat other then that really good! 5/5

Very good... 5/5 ive done only 4 of your poems sofar. i will do the rest mabey later.. your on my favorites thouh now so i will definately read and comment on all your poems eventually.

Everytime i read one of your poems its a new experience. your poem is depressing and deep. kind of a hard thing to deal with in life lonelyness is one of my worst fears. thank you for your comment.

Also can relate......great poems they are so awesome

What a good poem. I understand exactly what your saying. Caught my attention. Meaning...great

Another really sad poem..hope it aint at all true!
take care, keep it up!
xxx
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Great poem, its very well written and the emotions are very clear.

well done

5/5

Wow.. this is a very deep poem.. so much feeling an emotion to it.. you've written a very good poem.. the message to this poem is clear its like you've painted a picture.. my deepest regards to you for your experieces and what you have to go thru.. very well thoguht out poem and with depth to it =) keep it up!

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