Comments : Worries That Devour Me

  • 19 years ago

    by ShadowDancer

    I got a bit confused. i think maybe ou need to use spacing?? jsut an idea. but u have a good use of vocabluary. nice work

    Ruby

  • 19 years ago

    by shadowlight

    I agree with ruby about the spacing.

    however, i like the overall feel of the poem :-)

  • 19 years ago

    by tender69

    Here's a quick explanation, or atleast what I wanted it to say:
    worries follow me around and live inside me,there only purpose is to scare me.I want to learn the basis of my worrying and the truth behind them. something inside me knows everything,but I cannot access it.worry is like the evil side of a person but it chooses to show itself b/c it is at peace with being a horrible thing.then I worry about death and know that one day I will die, no matter what.thats pretty much it, but you could have gotten something totally different from it.hope this helps=)

  • 18 years ago

    by Larry

    One of the best poems I have read on this site -- I would advise you to place it as an entry on the artistic poetry contest discussion board -- I urge you to get involved -- and maybe think about not using conjunctions