A Melodious Failure

by HansRik   Nov 2, 2005


The fire that devours its every obliteration
Creating wasteful memories of a bygone abstraction
In the pathetic diminuendo of this futility,
Playing the horrid notes of this dissonance.

A painful recollection of putrid sentiments,
Burning from within, breaking into irrelevant fragments.
Crows and frogs bawl this pain in unison,
Portraying all the truths of this remembrance.

The wanderers of this timeless world
May also try, and fail, their love to hold
Knowing not that all such attempts are vain,
For love is the fire that consumes it all with its trance.

The shadows of these erratic melodies,
Will always crawl in their pitiable atrocities,
And the echoes from within emptiness
Laugh at the one who loved and lost his stance.

This senseless pain consuming the skins
Of treacherous mistakes and malapropisms
That decay forever in the pointless senses.
Such horrendous prevarications must not be glanced.

The taste and smell of death
Have filled the sterile, lifeless earth
Where desolate silhouettes roam with no purpose.
Inhospitable Loneliness is no longer subject to chance.

Vultures eat the Lovers' carcasses,
These foolish creatures that perfidy caresses.
The deadly souls sing of their failures,
Creating the eternal Largo of Romance.

This sinful and spiteful malice
Of a composition for these fetid lies.
The harmony of the spheres plays in Sorrow,
For this death shall not end, in its appalling silence.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Allison

    That was really deep. I thought it had a nice flow to it. Keep up the good work. *5/5*

  • 18 years ago

    by LonelyNightsHurt

    You are an AWESOME writer, and im still waitin on the one you said you'd write for me...lol...love brittany

  • 18 years ago

    by Feline Fatigue

    May also try, and fail, their love to hold
    Knowing not that all such attempts are vain,
    I think you should re-write these two lines. I understand it, but it can't hold up the poem, if you know what I mean.
    Laugh at the one who loved and lost his stance.
    You should shorten that up a bit or re-write it.
    appalling
    It's a good word, but it doesn't go well in the poem in this case. Try an alternet word.
    Over-all, another strong, meaningful poem. Bravo. But this time I must give a 4/5, because of a few bumps and bruises as I read it.

  • 18 years ago

    by shadowlight

    Fantastic poem. the wide vocabulary used ensured a lack of repition which you so often find.

    5/5 well done

  • 18 years ago

    by Gesselle Valle

    Como siempre tus poemas son muy buenos. Escribeme y te embiare mi nuevo nombre...para que leas mis poemas...5/5 great poem and keep it up.